with
vicious teeth
to crack my skull
you smile at me
with
guttural roars
that paralyze
you speak to me
oh great Bear
you enter into my cave
and you tear me apart
with
sleepy eyes
as the winter nears
you look at me,
and see right through me
am i so transparent?
with
a stomach full
of bitter and tart fruit
to last you through the winter,
you pull me into your arms-
could i ever be cold in them?
oh great Bear
how i fear your majesty
you fill me with a symphony
of sounds to lull me asleep
a sleep that takes everything out of me
am i so vulnerable in your arms?
with
violent hands
you lift me up
and i pray to God you wont let me fall
with
silent eyes
you stare at me
how i wish you'd speak
oh great Bear
i never want to lose this shelter
i never want to lose you
i'm terrified that when winter comes,
you'll leave me alone in the snow
take me on this path with you
into the cave, keep me in your arms
keep me warm
Oh great Bear
my realized weakness is killing me
oh great Bear
My Bear,
please dont hurt me.
~brittany
weirdo
11-4-09
3 comments:
Wow. This actually has exceptional imagery. And what I liked the fact that you didn't really even have to use descriptive words to get the images to pop out at me (the reader). It's pretty unique actually. It has great iambic pentameter too, which I am not sure you tried for intentionally. Look up that word and you will learn something new about writing terms if you didn't already know that word :)
I think that this is really good. It's heart warming and you sort of root for the main character to get her way and have the great bear love her forever and ever, specially when he is staring into her eyes without saying anything. Unspoken words with your eyes can sometimes be the most beautiful.
replace the word bear with sandwich and you have a quality poem
lol at adam.
Is this an analogy for a man in your life? seems to be that way. Either way I do thoroughly enjoy your expose on your encounter with this bear-man and like the altogether humbleness and weakness you were not afraid to show
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